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John's First Article as Minneapolis Gun Rights Examiner

BB62

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Good article, good points. Short and effective.

Just a few things:

- the first sentence says "Brandy"

- "You see … the way it works is this." - I would have ended it with a ":" and made the "The" of the next sentence lowercase.

- I would have made the final sentence a seperate paragraph for punch.

Get a new picture - you're better looking that it shows!
 

John Pierce

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I fixed the mis-spelling. It apparently takes a few minutes for newly updated content to refresh.

As for looking better than that picture, I will take that as a compliment and try to get a better picture taken but I am not sure that it will look any better. :)



BB62 wrote:
Good article, good points. Short and effective.

Just a few things:

- the first sentence says "Brandy"

- "You see … the way it works is this." - I would have ended it with a ":" and made the "The" of the next sentence lowercase.

- I would have made the final sentence a seperate paragraph for punch.

Get a new picture - you're better looking that it shows!
 
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